The Small Things of Life (rewrite)
Second versionI know it's just a paper cut that stings,yet even you can see my finger bleed.Perhaps my will must fall to lesser things.I wonder, though, just how it is you readthe sprinkled blood that...
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Hi Stamore. I read the first tercet and I was applauding wildly - oh, this is good... yes, there are those whose will falls at lesser things.Line 4 appealed too - comparing a minor wound to a weed......
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Hi Stamore,I guess the key word to this interesting terza rima is:"rants". So this format suits your purpose perfectly well!If one keeps this in mind perhaps the couplet can be understood as being...
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Hey Jude and Crispin, thanks for the responses.Your readings differed: Crispin, you got what I wanted to say, I think; and Jude, you interpreted what I feared I said. Can you sort that mess out. I...
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Nice to see a t/r sonnet here. (Mike A's our resident specialist on these, by the way.)Good comment above. I'd only add that for me the metaphor in S2 doesn't hang together. I can't imagine how you...
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Thanks for the response. You're right about the metaphor in the second stanza. I wondered how that would go across.stamore
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